The Chase

The moment he entered the bar, the first thing he saw was her. She sat at the bar with her lazy drink. Long legs crossed on the tall bar stool. One hand holding her drink, the other folded on her chest. Blood red backless dress with tiny intertwined knots just below the nape of her neck. Hair tied up in a chignon that accentuated her tall neck. Oh! The neck and the back and the long legs! He knew he had to talk to her.

He was wondering what his approach should be. There was something oddly tantalizing about her. And yet he knew that she was the no-nonsense-type. Chic, reserved and sophisticated. And she was new around here, that he was sure of. Otherwise he would have known who she was. He was just about to make a move on her, when she suddenly turned her head towards him and looked him directly in the eye as if somehow she sensed his gaze. Her expression turned to one of  amusement as if she could hear him think.

He noted the big doe eyes. Coffee brown in color. Huge lashes. Pretty brows. Long, thin nose. And lips matching her dress. She still had that amused expression on her face and he thought, he needn’t have worried so much. She already seemed pretty interested. Otherwise  why would their eyes be still locked on to each other’s? This was gonna be easy. He was going to grab the stool next to her. And just at that moment, in one fluid motion she was on her feet. And before he could make a move, she crossed the whole length of the bar to walk to the smoking zone. As she put her hand to open the door, he noted the long, slender fingers with red nails. And she disappeared beneath the cloud of smoke.

He followed her inside. It didn’t take him long to spot her. She was sitting on the couch at the end of the room with a cigarette in her hand. As he watched her he realized there was something oddly sensual about the way she smoked. The red finger tips, the cigarette and the flirting smoke that arose through the red lips. And the look in her eyes. Provoking, challenging as if she was daring him to make a move.

He was so entwined in the image of her, so lost in absorbing the beauty of her that it came as a mild shock to him when she turned towards the person she was sitting next to. He hadn’t noticed anyone except her in the room. She gave him one last look  through the corner of her eye as she locked her lips with the man besides her. He felt as if someone punched him in the stomach when he saw the wedding band on her hand with the red nails as she dug them in her husband’s hair.


This post has been written for picture it & write by ermilia


26 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. joetwo
    Jul 18, 2012 @ 22:35:36

    Drat! All the good ones are taken!


  2. Addie
    Jul 18, 2012 @ 22:37:51

    I love! I was imagining Liv Tyler all throughout.


  3. Anne Schilde
    Jul 18, 2012 @ 23:53:03

    This was a fun read. The locked eyes with a stranger, the last glance before the kiss… she sounds like a cheater.


  4. carolynpageabc
    Jul 19, 2012 @ 05:26:55

    Haha…. that ending surprised and tickled me. I can see this happening in real life…Darn… Very enjoyable read Shalvika; let’s hope he remembers this encounter the next time he goes to a bar….!! 🙂


  5. mistylayne
    Jul 19, 2012 @ 06:03:20

    Love the photo! And really like the story. 🙂 Love those twisty not fair endings!


  6. Ermilia
    Jul 19, 2012 @ 08:19:09

    Hehe! Nice ending. What a shame for our main character. Ah well, better luck next time. I like how she dissapeared beneath a cloud of smoke when she entered the smoking zone. A great touch. Thanks for contributing today at Picture it & write!

    – Ermisenda


  7. roughseasinthemed
    Jul 19, 2012 @ 12:11:15

    That was a good read. Being a non-smoker I guess if I had been writing it our hero would have lost interest as soon as she cleared off to the smoking area!


  8. Soma Mukherjee
    Jul 19, 2012 @ 17:08:12

    oh the tease she was..definitely inviting trouble…loved the story


  9. Paula
    Jul 19, 2012 @ 19:14:22

    Nice writing again 🙂


  10. island traveler
    Jul 20, 2012 @ 08:16:44

    If it was me I would be sadden too if the object of my affection also has a wedding band. That, if I was still single which was so many year ago. Ha, ha, ha. Beautiful writing the captivates the reader till the end.


  11. Arindam
    Jul 23, 2012 @ 02:37:16

    Beautifully written post. I like the way you presented both the characters. Their individuality was shining throughout this post with your words. You have a long way to go a writer. Keep up the good work.


  12. Naomi Baltuck
    Jul 25, 2012 @ 08:08:29

    Cute! Nice surprise ending.


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