We were friends at one time
And then we were more than friends
You loved me and I loved you
You promised me a million things and I kissed you and promised you a little more
We did a lot of things together
Watched movies, held hands, talked for hours
I was happy
You were happy
I was happy that you were happy
You made me feel good about me
I hope I made you feel the same
And then I did something stupid
Something I shouldn’t have said
And everything shattered
“WE” changed to YOU and ME
I am lost today without you
I feel a void that never seems to shrink
I feel lost without you,
And more, without your friendship
Today, as I sat here going through some of our old chats
I remembered what you meant to me
What I meant to you
And I remembered
What Best Times are Made of
You were the best thing that happened to me
I treasure that
But I do not regret “WE” didn’t work
Because you taught me a lot
And more than anything else
What you truly taught me was
What Best Times are Made of
And I will be eternally grateful to you for that
And I will love you
Until my dying day
DISCLAIMER: This is my first attempt at something that’s different than plain prose. And for the sake of not insulting all the great poets we have around here, I’m not going to term it “poetry”. So that’s about it!
Aug 10, 2012 @ 22:22:18
it is poetry and it speaks to the human condition – what else is poetry than the expression of human emotion? do not belitte your talents – this poem speaks
Aug 10, 2012 @ 23:04:38
Well, thank you so much for your kind words.
But it is human nature to be critical of everything you do yourself right?
Aug 10, 2012 @ 23:26:40
yes, I have started writing haikus and call them haikuish–because there are so many wonderful writers of haiku — so I am just as bad as you — I think my message to you, was a message to me too!
Aug 11, 2012 @ 11:13:47
Haha. But I think we all tend to underestimate ourselves
Aug 12, 2012 @ 15:44:10
I agree with onthehomefront. Please do not belittle your talent. This is a heartfelt piece and is exactly what poetry is about.
Aug 12, 2012 @ 16:39:41
Thank you so much Debra for your kind words. I’m feeling a lot less anxious about it now that I have so many nice comments.
Aug 13, 2012 @ 01:00:38
Good I’m glad to hear that and am looking forward to reading more of your POETRY!
Aug 13, 2012 @ 10:06:16
Aug 11, 2012 @ 00:39:45
I love it
And, what I love about some of the blogs I follow is that we all venture out into that so called poetic world – me included – and find we can write something that others can empathise with and understand.
Here’s my first effort, nice to get some supporting comments from other bloggers:
http://cloudsmovingin.wordpress.com/2012/04/30/retirement/
I wouldn’t have written the same words as you – regarding the feelings – but still doesn’t stop it working. Only because I would have been unsure about the love until dying day – I would have left that more vague, but that is my style and not yours
Aug 11, 2012 @ 11:15:47
I checked out yours and I loved it
And yes, some of us prefer subtlety, some of us prefer directness.
I had found it difficult to believe that people would empathize with what I call my amateurish attempt at poetry.
Aug 11, 2012 @ 12:15:22
Haha. Yes that was exactly how I felt
Aug 11, 2012 @ 00:42:11
Nicely done. I have felt these feelings. When words are arranged in such a way that they move the reader, it’s art. You created art. I’d call that a success at your first attempt at poetry!
Aug 11, 2012 @ 11:19:58
Thank you so much Lorna!
You know these little pieces of encouragement just make you feel so nice. Thanks again!
Aug 11, 2012 @ 01:02:37
Lovely and sad. I like how you’re able to appreciate what you had though, that’s hard to do sometimes.
Aug 11, 2012 @ 11:22:55
It takes a hell of a lot of time to appreciate that Misty. But in the end you just reach a point where you have accept the good parts of the relationship and move on.
And I’m glad you like it
Aug 11, 2012 @ 04:38:42
Awww…. that was so sweet….
Aug 11, 2012 @ 11:23:18
Thanks Carolyn!
Aug 11, 2012 @ 11:24:37
I want to give you a bigggggg hug… xoxoxo
Aug 11, 2012 @ 11:28:30
Awww.. I so wish that! Muah
Aug 11, 2012 @ 17:50:35
Here’s a minimalist approach.
A BARE BONES AFFAIR
Hello
Thank you
Sorry
Goodbye
(Miss you)
Aug 11, 2012 @ 19:34:07
Aug 11, 2012 @ 21:49:42
Sometimes laziness is your friend.
Aug 13, 2012 @ 11:37:34
Oyee Shalvika have you not read what i write in the name of poetry !!!
jokes apart..loved you poem…sad how relationships change,
beautifully woven
Aug 13, 2012 @ 11:47:27
Thank you Soma! I’m glad you like it.
And sweetheart, what you write in the name of poetry is kickass and I love it
And yes, changing relationships are a pain in the ass. But life is too short to sit moping around for someone. You left me, your loss
Aug 13, 2012 @ 22:47:47
It is poetry when it touches someone soul, as it did mine today. I can feel the love, the hurt and the moving forward. Blessings – Patty
Aug 15, 2012 @ 17:41:20
Thank you so much Patty for your kind words.
Aug 15, 2012 @ 11:59:11
Thoughts deeply buried inside each and every word. luckily visited your blog today. But your so called poetry(as u said) made me ponder over a loss i once suffered.
Aug 15, 2012 @ 17:42:35
Thank you Prateek. I’m glad you found something you could relate to.
Thanks for visiting
Dec 05, 2012 @ 17:46:07
This is beautiful portrayal of emotions… when you fall in and out of love
Nice
Dec 15, 2012 @ 23:02:53
Thanks a lot Varsha!!